The End

A 27-word challenge posted by Jenny Matlock inspired this little poem with the prompt ‘the end’.

Each moment a fragment of time

Whorled into the next,

By eyes averted from the end,

A trick of the light,

This illusion I call ‘my life’.

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18 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Judie
    Jun 05, 2011 @ 15:04:19

    Beautifully written!

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  2. Sue Anderson
    Jun 05, 2011 @ 18:05:08

    Nice one!

    =)

    Reply

  3. claudia
    Jun 05, 2011 @ 19:06:45

    Oh, I like this one! Brief but captures a world of thought.

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  4. jo
    Jun 05, 2011 @ 19:20:28

    beautiful!

    Reply

  5. cj Schlottman
    Jun 05, 2011 @ 19:32:59

    “This illusion I call ‘my life’.” spoke to me in a loud and clear voice. This post moves and flows nicely, and it is thought provoking. It is a joy to read. Thanks.

    Namaste………cj

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  6. Nonna Beach
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 00:55:45

    Whoa…Excellent ! There’s so much to ponder a chew on in so few words !

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  7. iamjoross
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 04:04:08

    apt and concise. 😀

    Reply

  8. Anna's Adornments
    Jun 06, 2011 @ 11:54:23

    You have written an excellent poem. This prompt seems to be inspiring some very good poems about death and dying. We try to not think about it, but it is there. Always. And it is our task to help those whom we love och who love us, to help them leave this world in peace.

    My mother held my father’s hand until the end. Their love was amazing. She kept her promise to love and cherish him, and he was gratful to her for it. “Be happy” was one of the last things he said before he no longer could speak.
    Best wishes,
    Anna
    Miss O’Hara’s Last Words” SC wk 57

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  9. Jenny Matlock
    Jun 11, 2011 @ 21:18:39

    Such powerful imagery in so few words. Excellent.

    Reply

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