The space between heartbeats

The wind made the green grass dance and wave,
As the sun caught the traces of evening dew,
And the falling yellow leaves.
There and then I fell in love with the world,
In the space between heartbeats,
Before one thought could follow another
And tell me what I wanted was not what was there
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50 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Aaron Smigielski
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 21:18:44

    In the space between heartbeats,
    Before one thought could follow another
    And tell me what I wanted was not what was there
    Such a great way to describe one moment in time. excellent poem!

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  2. erbdex
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 21:20:54

    Utterly exceptional. Shakespeare would’ve applauded.

    Just wow. You’re just wow, mark.

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  3. Summer Zheng
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 22:02:23

    hah~ a short and interesting one~~~

    what were you doing between the heartbeats?

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  4. Heaven
    Jul 27, 2011 @ 22:33:46

    Very nice play of words ~

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  5. Jingle
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 00:08:01

    your words are full of wonders.

    love the flow.
    Happy Rally.

    πŸ™‚

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  6. C Rose
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 00:18:16

    “The space between heartbeats” this says so much, truly captivating write ~ Rose

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  7. Padmavani
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 00:50:10

    Hello Mark

    I loved the first three lines for the description of sweet beauty in nature. And also as a mood setter for the last four lines. May we all have such moments.

    Cheers
    Padmavani

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  8. Sonia G Medeiros
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 01:14:40

    Beautiful! It’s hard to pick a favorite line. I love them all and the way they flow together.

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  9. Jaan Pehchaan
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 05:54:43

    A lot happens in the space between the heartbeats. Here is mine: http://jaanpehchaan.wordpress.com/2011/07/21/what-do-you-dream/

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  10. charlesmashburn
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 22:03:48

    Wonderful flow. Song-like in it’s melodic structure.

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  11. luna15
    Jul 28, 2011 @ 22:36:38

    loved this! follow your instincts before your head gets in the way! yeah!

    πŸ™‚

    Luna

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  12. booguloo
    Jul 29, 2011 @ 00:14:24

    A sad longing in a short period. Beautiful picture painted in words.

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  13. Miriam Sagan
    Jul 29, 2011 @ 17:24:15

    Great last line–stays with me.

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  14. Donna Swanson
    Jul 29, 2011 @ 18:15:39

    Short but sweet. Thanks

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  15. jennifaye
    Jul 30, 2011 @ 04:10:42

    Been reading a lot of poetry blogs. This is my favorite. “The space between heartbeats” is heartbreaking …in an emo-giddy good way. Err… πŸ™‚ Seriously, one of my faves.

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  16. Cherlyn
    Jul 30, 2011 @ 16:30:05

    Ah, short and sweet indeed. I really love the message of this poem, I too have always thought of happiness being small moments of perfection, that come and go as quickly as a heart beat. I love the last line especially – great work!

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  17. Miss Kitten
    Jul 30, 2011 @ 20:05:13

    Fantastic! Love the colors and the way you paint a picture with your words. There is a timeless, almost eternal quality to it. As if it takes place out of time. Well done!

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  18. Raivenne
    Jul 30, 2011 @ 23:10:26

    “…
    Before one thought could follow another
    And tell me what I wanted was not what was there”

    The last stanza and these last two lines especially… Oh, the eternity held between the two heartbeats! How the soul can soar and vale within it. bravo!

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  19. eva626
    Jul 31, 2011 @ 01:10:41

    wow-zerz!!!

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  20. Ina
    Jul 31, 2011 @ 13:45:55

    What a splendid poem, superbe! πŸ™‚

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  21. Jake Wilcocks
    Aug 03, 2011 @ 05:51:05

    You put me right into that moment..

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  22. smzang
    Aug 04, 2011 @ 04:00:06

    “Before one thought could follow another
    And tell me what I wanted was not what was there”

    reality creeps into the space between heartbeats..

    well written
    and a dynamic ending

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  23. elizakeller
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 00:36:44

    Excellent! I like “before one thought could follow another…”

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  24. TheMsLvh
    Aug 06, 2011 @ 04:44:04

    A truly beautiful poem! BRAVA!

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  25. yelena
    Sep 25, 2014 @ 20:50:36

    beautifully done.

    Reply

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